Rate my poem 1-10 and tell me how to make it better ^^?

Before you post your writing online to be criticized, you should really run it through spell check, or have someone edit it. Writing is extremely personal, and it's a good idea to make sure it looks professional before opening it up for public opinion. Poetry is all about conscious decision--everything needs to be planned. You didn't include punctuation in your poem, which is a bold decision. If you choose to do that, there should be a significant reason behind it. Also, your inclusion of anaphora, or, the repetition of words in the beginning of a line should also be purposeful. The feelings that are expressed in this poem are something that should really be discussed with a counselor or person you trust, not shown to the public. I rate this -2.